IMPROVING THE

VOCABULARY
SYNONYMS
 Portray Represent Reveal Convey
Signify
Manifest
Symbolize
Disclose
Show Illustrate
Divulge
exhibit
Indicate
Express Demonstrate
Describe
 sorrowful dejected regretful depressed
miserable
disconsolate
downhearted
grief-stricken
sad despondent
gloomy
wretched
mournful low-spirited
melancholic imply
• To show
• Happy
• Sad
• Lonely
• Scared
• As an example
 isolated outcast forsaken abandoned
rejected
unpopular
unloved
remote
lonely unwanted
uninhabited
lonesome
unoccupied despondent
stranded deserted
 remark announce comment pronounce
assume
articulate
declare
express
say claim
articulate
mention
bring forward disclose
suggest imply
 content merry jocular gleeful
amusing
rapture
entertaining
jubilation
happy delight
bliss
pleasure
ecstasy
exhilaration
elation euphoric
 for instance such as to support with

an instance
as elucidate
For
example
as
revealed
to exemplify by
in particular illustrated by
 frightened agitated nervous alarmed
intimidated
daunting

petrified
dismayed
scared panic-stricken
disconcerted

aghast frantic
hysterical
appalled startled
Conjunctions
Read this answer…
The writer has said “plumes of spray from the narwhal catching the
light in a spectral play of colour” which shows the colour and place in
the place where she been. The writer also talks about the sky like “The
evening light was turning butter-gold” which the writer tries to say the
beauty of the nature while the men’s are trying to catch the narwhal.
The writer also shows sympathy to the seal “us several years ago of
men battering seals for their fur” which shows the sympathy towards
to narwhal and there justifies the reaction by the humans.
 IMPROVING…
The writer has said “plumes of spray from the narwhal
catching the light in a spectral play of colour” which
shows the colour and place in the place where she been. The
writer also talks about the sky like “The evening light was
turning butter-gold” which the writer tries to say the
beauty of the nature while the men’s are trying to catch the
narwhal. The writer also shows sympathy to the seal “us
several years ago of men battering seals for their fur” which
shows the sympathy towards to narwhal and
there justifies the reaction by the humans.
 IMPROVED VERSION…
The writer utilizes the visual imagery “plumes of spray from the narwhal catching
the light in a spectral play of colour” to present her awe, while observing the
fascinating nature around Thule creating an effect in the readers’ minds. Further,
Herbert describes her overwhelming feeling through the metaphor “The evening
light was turning butter-gold” that elucidates the breathtaking nature which is
contrasted with the dangers the hunters are facing.
The writer also sympathizes with the narwhal through triplets “to dive, to leave,
to survive.” On the other hand, the utilization of the famous fact about seal
hunting has assisted her to present her dilemma -her sympathy towards the
hunters as well as the narwhals. For instance “…us several years ago of men
battering seals for their fur..” indicates how the eskimos are using every part of
the narwhal for various purposes and how essential narwhal killing is for them
which cannot be considered as hunting for pleasure as above. Moreover, it
justifies the actions of the Inuits.