Introduction : The line graph illustrate the number of cars per households in Great Britain over a period of 36
years
Overview :
Số lượng có xe của các hộ gia đình tăng từ năm 1971- 2007
2 cars tăng nhiều nhất
1 car thì giảm nhiều nhất
Overall, the percentage of the car ownership in Britain increased significantly between 1971 and 2007. The
proportion of the households that had two cars increased. The figure for households without a car fell.
Phát triển ý:
[Link] proportion of the households that had two cars increased.
-> An upward trend can be observed in the number of families owing two cars
- An upward trend: Một xu hướng gia tăng
- Observed: quan sát
2. Từ nối giữa các câu:
In particular: cụ thể
While: trong khi
=> Overall, the percentage of the car ownership in Britain increased significantly between 1971 and 2007. In
particular, an upward trend can be observed in the number of families owning two cars, while the figure for
households without one car fell.
Body 1: Miêu tả năm đầu ( 1971)
Gần 50% các hộ gia đình không dùng xe ô tô
Khoảng 44% các gia đình sở hữu 1 ô tô
7% có 2 xe
Hiếm có gia đình có 3 hoặc nhiều xe trở lên ( chỉ khoảng 2%)
In 1971, almost half off all households in Britain ( British households) did not have ( own) a car. ( Bo sung :
reflecting a relatively low level of private vehicle ownership at the time). Around 44% (Approximately 44% ) of
households had one car ( had access to one car) and 7% had two cars (, but only a further 7% owned two) . It was
uncommon for families to own three or more cars, with around 2% of households falling into this category
Body 2: Miêu tả năm cuối ( 2007)
- Giảm sâu, mạnh nhất : no car ( khoảng 27%)
- Phổ biến nhất : one car ( số liệu không thay đổi nhiều)
- Tăng mạnh : two car ( tăng lên 26%)
- Tăng: three car ( tăng lên 6%)
The graph show a sharp drop in the proportion of the households did not have no car. But also , the most
common type was the car ownership had one car, there was little change in the figure for this category. A steady
climb in households had two cars, which was increase 26% and there was a boom in the quality of the families
that had three or more cars in 8%.
Sai :
- show -> shows
-the households did not have no car-> the households that did not have car ( phủ định kép), ( phải có mệnh đề
quan hệ vì đây là hai mệnh đề mà không có từ nối)
- But also -> In addition
-the most common type was the car ownership had one car ( sai về logic : car ownership là sự sở hữu xe viết vậy
là thành sự sở hữu có một chiếc xe) , ( sai về ngữ pháp 2 mệnh đề không có mối liên kết)
-A steady climb in households had two cars-> that had two cars
- which was increase 26% -> which was increased 26%.
-the quality of the families -> the quality là phẩm chất, chất lượng của cái gì đó nên dùng trong trường hợp này là
sai.
-in 8% -> sử dụng in sẽ không rõ ràng tăng bn hay đạt mức nào
=> Tổng kết :
Sai thêm “S”
Sai thiếu mệnh đề quan hệ để liên kết giữa 2 câu
Sai cách dùng từ ( But also , in 8%)
Viết câu bị động quên ed
Sai về câu học thuật, nghĩa ( car ownership had one car,the quality of the families)
Sai phủ định kép ( the households that did not have car)
Chữa: - Nên viết one car riêng để tăng sự phổ biến của nó
- Nếu trong bài có cái tăng mạnh nhất và cái tăng thấp nhất thì nên để chung vô 1 ý để so sánh và nêu được
sự đố
Bài hoàn chỉnh:
The line graph illustrates the number of cars per household in Great Britain over a period of 36 years.
Overall, car ownership in Britain increased between 1971 and 2007. In particular, the percentage of
households with two cars rose steadily, while the figure for households without a car declined
substantially.
In 1971, almost half of all British households did not own a car, reflecting a relatively low level of
private vehicle ownership at the time. Approximately 44% of households had one car, while a further
7% owned two cars . It was uncommon for families to own three or more cars, with around 2% of
households falling into this category.
The household with one car were the most common type from the late 1970s onwards, although
there was little change in the figures for this category. The biggest change was seen in the proportion
of households without a car, which fell steadily over the 36-year period to around 25% in 2007. In
contrast, the proportion of two-car families rose steadily, reaching about 26% in 2007, and the share
of household with three or more cars also saw a marked increase, reaching 5% by the end of the
period.
