Paper 3 (Listening and Integrated Skills)

Part A (compulsory section)

Task 1 (13 marks)

1. history [93]
2 sister cities [87]
3. in I from different countries II not in/ from the same country [65]
4. after World War 2 I Second World War [55]
5. fighting (with each other) II enemies II at war [58]
6. Gennany, France [81]
7. next to each other II easy to communicate (with each other) [67]
8. B [74]
9. language [79]
10. food [89]
11. business links [65]
12. banking [74]
13. fashion design [73]

Task 2 (13 marks)

14. 10 /ten [53]

15. secondary (school) [48]
16. retired II senior citizen [63]
17. (do some) research (60]
18. life experience(s) (to offer) [60]
19. knowledge of I know a lot about Hong Kong [54]
20. enthusiasm for I interest in I enthusiastic about! interested in (other countries') cultures I cultures [ 14]
(from other countries)
21. any [60]
22. lived I been living in Hong Kong I here for (at least) three years [69]
23. online [66]
24. June 30th II end of June [65]
25. been (already) chosen [65]
26. represent all/ different (political) parties

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 Task 3 (15 marks)

27. started in low(er) class (districts) [49]

28. with other men [80]
29. wives I girlfl"iends not there I were in Europe II came alone to Argentina [23]
30. witness the passion (of a football game) [48]
31. (beet) sandwiches won prizes II best (beet) sandwiches in world [23]
32. explains game/ as you watch //learn from (a legendary ex-) player [47]
33. capital (of Poland) [39]
34. ha!fofthe castle destroyed [40]
35. walls taken down II building material required [36]
36. sold (mainly) clothes [50]
37. arts and crafts [26]
38. (they're) underground I under the square [49]
39. new factory [57]
40. communists II communist government// government in 1949 [25]
41 . to see communist architecture I ugly buildings II buildings now tourist attractions [26]

:: Task4(13marks)

42. invited into home II made to feel welcome [60]

43. heating on all time [28]
·
.
.. 44.
45.
thermal/ special winter underwear
he thought she needed to be grammatlcally perfect II she made grammar mistake
[22]
[55]
J.
/ 46. (at least) was trying to speak (the language)// she was trying her best II it was only a small e1ror [46]
j,
47. because the train took too long I was too slow I stopped at 52/ many stations I arrived too late II [58]
'
ij ..
the bus was quicker
·. 48. got wrong lift II ended up on a difficult slope [37]
49. had to ski down II no way down except to ski down [15]
·50. fell (down again and again I a lot) [49]
5L fi"ightened I negative I scared (so didn't ski again) II didn't want to ski again [43]
' 52. was giving a talk(about Hong Kong the next morning) [ 16]
; 53. called Julia's cousin I a farmer I someone nearby [47]
·54. he drove them in his tractor [22]

Figures in square brackets represent the percentage ofcandidates awarded a point for the item.
Points within this {bracket can be in any order.

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Part Bl (easier section)

Task 5 (17 marks)

Tas\{ Completion"' 13 marks

Note to markers: candidates must place the information in the correct section to be awarded a_f!!!int.
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Key facts about figures about Jade Islands

5.la How big is it? 5

S.lb How many people Jive there? 3'

S.lc How long did it take to build? 3'

Street desigu for family safety

Pedestrianised streets !I No roads or cars I no traffic I no vehicles on the street level//

Roads and rail links Wlderground
5.2a 3* 16
('Roads and rail links underground' may appear in the 'New and innovative transport
solutions' section)

5.2b so children can play I run around I in the streets I outdoors 3'

New and i1111ovative transport solutions

5.3a Water taxi (boats) (are convenient) 5

5.3b Monorail (links east and west ends of islands) 5

Co11venlent location for travel to Hong Koug and overseas

5.4a Car or bus to Central only 30 minutes 5

5.4b Train to airport only 20 minutes 5

Environmentally friendly home features and their bmefits

5.5a (All buildings use) solar panels and wind turbines I technologies 6/9

5.5b so cheaper electricity II big savings on electricity bills 6/9

5.5c Green roofs and balconies 6/9

i .

5.5d keep people I you! us I buildings cool in summer 6/9

• Jnformatwnfiom page 3 ofthe Data Ftfe tsfrom the tapescnpt

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 Task 5: Language= 3 marks

Marks Language
3 Data file manipulation
Generally successful in adapting phrases fi:om the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences through: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own Language
• Question fonnation generally accurate .
• ComprelJensible throughout.
• Spelling is accurate .
2 Data file manipulation
Generally sm;:cessful in adapting phrases from the Data File through: word formation changes,
tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own Language
• Question fonnation may contain errors but they are clearly questions .
• Errors do not generally affect comprehension .
• Spelling is generally accurate .
I Data file manipulation
Generally successful in isolating relevant phrases from the Data File for the text.
Own Language
• Some attempt at question formation .
• Simple phrases are generally accurate .
• Grammatical errors sometimes affect understanding .
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not.
0 • Multiple errors throughout, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award '1 ', possibly due to the candidate
copying everything verbatim from the Data File.

Task 5: Appropriacy = 1 mark

Marks Appropriacy
I • Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and
own language.
• The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task.

0 • Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.
• The candidate has written a text which is characterised by having copied chunks of the Data File
indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer's own text written to fulfil the task.

Key Appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

+ • It is a sales brochure. The purpose is therefore to inform and to promote.

• The intended audience is prospective customers .

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Task 6 (19 marks)

Task Completion= 10 marks

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6.1 Subject line#

6.2 You have won the Home Viewing Day competition 4

Dates attd times

6.3a On 18th June 7

6.3b Meet outside the Marcliffe Hotel (in Central) at 12 noon for bus (to the Jade Islands) 8

Buffet details and /tome viewing

6.4a (Buffet lWlch) at YeUow Dragon Restaurant 7

6.4b l.OOpm 7

6.4c Western and Chinese food buffet 7

6.4d with (free glass of) wine 7

6.4e Viewing in Show Home from 3.00-5.00 pm 7

6.4f Drop off6: 15pm at Marcliffe Hotel II be back at Marcliffe Hotel at 6:15pm 8

#The subject line may vary but generally there are three acceptable types. One that mentions:
The Jade Islands (Home Viewing Day) competition; or
Details of the Home Viewing Day; or
Winner of the Home Viewing Day competition.

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Task 6: Language"" 5 marks

Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences through: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences .
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common e1rors that do not affect overall clarity.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct
4 Data File Manipulation
Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
senteJJces. This is done through some of: word fOrmation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes
etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences .
• Grammatical enors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected.
• Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning.
3 Data File Manipulation
Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the
requirements ofhislher own text
Own Language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use
more complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.
• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning .
• Most common words are spelt coJTectly, with basic punctuation being accurate .
2 Data File Manipulation
Writing characterised by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken
verbatim from the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate . Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex
sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly
accmate.

I Data File Manipulation

Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning .
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty .
0 • Writing characterised by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
• Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding
impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award 'l ',

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Task 6: Coherence and Organisation= 2 marks

Marks Coherence and Organisation

2 • Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughout
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear.
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary.

• Overall coherence oftex:t is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout.
• The relations between main points and supporting points genera!ly clear.
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy.

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points.
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award 'I'.

Task 6: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy
2 • Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and own
language.
• The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task.

1 • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to the text through some manipulation of parts of
Data File and through own language.
• Tone may be inconsistent due to parts being copied verbatim from the Data File.

0 • Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.
• The candidate has Mitten a text which is characterised by having copied chunks of the Data File
indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer's own text written to fulfil the task.

Key Appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

• It is an email informing the customer s/he has won a competition.

• The writer is writing on behalf ofDPP.
• The intended audience is the winner of the competition.
• The tone should be friendly (possibly congratulating the reader) and also informative and concise when
relating the details of the viewing day.

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Task 7 (17 marks)

Tasl• Completion= 8 marks

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reference
7.1 Acknowledge the email/ complaint 9

Problems with coustructioJt

Problem: noise from repair I maintenance work on underground rail link (all day and
7.2a 9
night, even at weekends)

7.2b Reason: flooding of underground rail link 4

7.2c Action/Solution: work from 9am to 7pm Monday to Saturday (from 18 April) 4

Problems with beaches

7.3a Problem: a lot of litter on beaches 3* I 9

7.3b Reason: litter washed into sea after rain 3'

Action/Solution: increase number of cleaners /20 more cleaners to collect rubbish

7 Jc 7
every morning

Reference to maintaining contact with the reader in the future II an attempt to enhance
7.4 cordial relations with the reader// an expression of hope that the reader is satisfied
with the solutions
, InfO/ matwnfrom page 3 ofthe Data File rs from the tapescnpt

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Task 7: Language= 5 marks

Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences through: word fonnation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences .
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional conunon enors that do not affect overall clarity .
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

4 Data File Manipulation

Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences. This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes
etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences .
• Granunatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected .
• Spe!ling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning .

3 Data File Manipulation

Occasionally successful in adapting phrases :from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences though more often errors occur due to fuiling to change the original texts to the
requirements of his/her own text.
Own Language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use
more complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.
• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning .
• Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate .

2 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterised by occasional attempts to adapt language fTom Data File or by chunks taken
verbatim from the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate . Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex
sentences.
• Granunatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly
accurate.

I Data File Manipulation

Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim :from the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate .
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty .

0 • Writing characterised by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
• Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding
impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award '1 ' .

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Task 7: Coherence and Organisation""" 2 marlts

Marks Coherence and Organisation

2 • Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear.
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary.

I • Overall coherence of text is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout.
• The relations between main points and supporting points generally clear.
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy .

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points .
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence ofthe text.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award 'I' .

Task 7: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy

2 • Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and own
language.
• The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task.

I • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to the text through some manipulation of parts of
Data File and through own language.
• Tone may be inconsistent due to parts being copied verbatim from the Data File .

0 • Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.
• The candidate has written a text which is characterised by having copied chunks ofthe Data File
indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer's own text written to fulfil the task.

Key Appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

• It is a letter written in response to a complaint email.

• The writer is writing on behalf of DPP.
• The intended audience is Mr Hannibal Chiu, a representative of the Jade Islands Residents' Concern
Group.
• The tone should be apologetic for the problems but also clear, concise and informative when relating
the reasons for the problems and the solutions.

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Part B2 (more difficult section)

Task 8 (22 marks)

Task Completion= 13 marks

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reference
Ge11eral features

8.la Keep key attractions of waterfall, lake and sailing ship but no castle 6/7

8Jb In line with jungle theme, castle is not 7

8.1c (Engineering team say) all features practical 8

La he

8.2a Make the lake an aquarium and (include) a swimming pool 6/7

8.2b Put swimming pool next to the aquarium 9

Swimming pool and aquarium to be separated by glass wall(s) (so swimmers can swim
8.2c 9
next to the sea creatures)

8.2d Have swimming pool under the waterfall (to maximise excitement) 9

8.2e Put zip lines above swimming pool (and in keeping with jungle theme) 6/7

Ship

8.3 Sailing ship should have restaurants but no shops as can't fit both 7

Waterfall

8.4a Abseil on sides of the waterfall (not in the waterfall) 7

8.4b Reduce height of waterfall from 40 metres to 30 metres 3* 18

lfthe waterfall is too high, it may cause clouds to form II If the waterfall is not too 3* /8
8.4c
high, clouds will not form

8.4d Clouds could damage electricity supply I cause power failure 3'
*InformatiOn from page 3 of the Data File Is from the tapesc11pt

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 Task 8: Language = 5 mari{S

Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Successful manipulation of phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences_
Achieved through a wide variety of changes made to the original texts.
Own Language
• A wide range of accurate sentence structures using own language, with an excellent grasp of
more complex structures.
• Grammar extremely accurate with very occasional slips .
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

4 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
i sentences through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.

I'
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences .
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly con·ect.
3 Data File Manipulation
Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences. This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes
etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence stmctures with some attempts to use more complex sentences .
• Grammatical errors occur in more complex structmes but overall clarity not affected .
• Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accmate to convey meaning .
2 Data File Manipulation
Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the
J"equirements of his/her own text.
Own Language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use
more complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.
• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning .
• Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate .
I Data File Manipulation
Writing characterised by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken
I
verbatim from the Data File.
Own Language
• Sh01t simple sentences are generally accurate . Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex
sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning .
• Spelling of simple words is con·ect, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly
accurate.

0 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate .
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning .
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty .
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award' I' .

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Task 8: Coherence and Organisation= 2 marks

Marks Coherence and Organisation

2 • Overall coherence of text is very good.
• It is clearly on topic and congruent with the subject
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear.
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary .

I • Overall coherence of text is reasonable.

• It is generally on topic and congruent with the subject.
• Relations between main points and supporting points generally dear .
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy .

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• It is mostly off topic and not clearly congruent with the subject.
• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points.
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award' 1'.

Task 8: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy
2 • Register, tone and style generally appropriate to text through manipulation of parts of Data File
and own language.
• Consistently demonstrates audience awareness.

1 • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to text through some manipulation of parts of
Data File and through own language.
• The tone may be inconsistent.

0 Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text

Key appropriacy areas include (but arc not limited to):

• It is an internal document.
• The intended audience is the writer's boss.
• A relevant title is appropriate.
• It is a workplace summary so should be concise and therefore not include much redundancy.
• It should not read like a recount of a narrative or have too much 'Ripple Wu said ... ', 'Mari Nakamura
says ... '
• Should be reasonably formal. Inappropriate words and phrases from the Data File include:
awesome space; Brilliant; can you imagine ... ; drop the castle; Gosh.1; Great;
I kid you not; Love it!; Love their concept; Since when ... ; when you think about it; Wow!

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Task 9 (18 marks)

Task 9 marks:

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reference
Recent achievements I
'
9.1a The biggest spenders of (three) biggest developers on green construction methods 10

We have increased the amount spent on green housing developments I environmentally

9.lb
friendly building technologies (since 2000)
10

9.1c Forest of Dreams housing estate won the Greenest (Housing) Development in 2016 10

Golden Flower Island

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9.2a Splash of Gold Orchid found only on island 4

Golden Dragon Tail butterfly only species in South China to pollinate Splash of Gold
9.2b 4
Orchid

9.2c 70 %will be maintained as designated nature park I protected area 3* I 4

9.2d No vehicles allowed on island 3'

9.2e Wall of vegetation between mall and nature park will prevent noise and light pollution 3'

9.2f so that butterflies are not disturbed 3'

• lnformatwn from page 3 ofthe Data F1le IS from the tapescnpt

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Task 9: Language= 5 marks

Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Successful manipulation of phrases from the Data File to create grammatically conect sentences.
Achieved through a wide variety of changes made to the original texts.
Own Language
• A wide range of accurate sentence structures using own language, with an excellent grasp of
more complex structures.
• Grammar extremely accurate with very occasional slips.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

4 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting from the Data File to create grammatically conect
sentences through some of: word fonnation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences.
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

3 Data File Manipulation

Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically conect
sentences. This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes
etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences.
• Grammatical enors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected.
• Spelling and punctuation are sufiiciently accurate to convey meaning.

2 Data File Manipulation

Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the
requirements of his/her ov.n text
Own Language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use
more complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.
• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning.
• Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate.

1 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterised by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks mken
verbatim fiom the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex
sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly
accurate.

0 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award' 1'.

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Task 9: Coherence and Organisation = 2 marks

Marks Coherence and Organisation

2 • Overall coherence of text is very good.
• It is clearly on topic and congruent with subject and given title .
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear .
• Strong cohesive tics used to enhance coherence when necessary .

I • Overall coherence of text is reasonable.

• It is generally on topic and congruent with the subject and given title .
• Relations between main points and supporting points generally clear.
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasiona!ly be fuzzy .

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• It is mostly off topic. Not clearly congruent with the subject or given title .
• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points .
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.
OR

t· Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award 'I'.

Task 9: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy -
2 • Register, tone and style generaJly appropriate to text through manipulation of parts of Data File
and own language.
• Consistently demonstrates audience awareness .

I • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to text through some manipulation of parts of
Data File and through own language.
• The tone may be inconsistent.

0 Little or no evidence of an abllity to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.

Key appropriacy areas include {but are not limited to):

• It is a document intended for the company webpage for the general public to read.
• The tone should be that of positive highlighting the company's achievements.
• The use of 'We are ... ' or 'DPP is/are .... ' or 'We at DPP are ... ' are all acceptable approaches.

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Task 10 (13 marks)

Task Completion= 7 marks

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referenc

Details of Event a11d Role

lO.Ia Guest of honour at opening ceremony of the Golden Flower Adventure Mall 4/11

10.1 b First to swim in the Golden Flower Adventure Mall pool 11

10. lc Event held on 24th December next year I 2018 11

Persuasive Details

10.2a We lalow you are a keen swimmer 5

l0.2b We know you love snorkelling and diving and being close to marine life 5

DPP will do all we can to preserve coral in Australia II DPP has given money I supports
10.2c 5 I 10
Save the Great Barrier Reef

Will give a sum of$100,000 to charity of your choice II to Save Hong Kong Coral
10.2d 5/11
Communities

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Task 10: Language"" 3 marks

Marks Lan!!ual!e
3 Data File Manipulation
Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically con·ect
sentences through some of: word fonnation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences .
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overa1l clarity .
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

2 Data File Manipulation

Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences. This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes
etc.
Own Language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences .
• Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected .
• Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning .
1 Data File Manipulation
Writing characterised by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken
verbatim from the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex
sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation mostly
accurate.

0 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterised by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own Language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate .
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty .
DR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award' I' .

Task 10: Coherence and Organisation = I mark

Marks Coherence and Organisation

1 • Overall coherence oftext is very good.

• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear .
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary.

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points .
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.
DR
• Not enough evidence in candidate's work to be able to award' 1' .

ISO
Task 10: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy
2 • Register, tone and style general!y appropriate to text through manipulation of parts of Data File
and own language.
• Consistently demonstrates audience awareness .

I • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to text through some manipulation of parts of
Data File and through own language.
• The tone may be inconsistent .

0 Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.

Key Appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

• It is a letter of invitation written to a celebrity who is not a personal acquaintance of the writer.
• The tone should be polite and persuasive but should not presume that Ms Tse has already accepted or
will accept.
• The issue of the possibility of Ms Tse giving her fees to charity is particularly delicate as the writer
does not know whether Ms Tse would want to do so or not It should therefore be presented as a
suggestion.
• The letter should end with some sort of polite request asking Ms Tse to let DPP know if she accepts the
invitation.

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