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Football Changed My Life

Yingtian LI (Hunt)

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Writing assignment C Module 2

Integrated Core Skills 5-5

Teacher: Jacqui Steward

June 13, 2017

Football Change My Life

disappointed with that attitude. I can assure you it is much, much more important

than that” (Bill Shankly). As everyone who knows me, I am obsessed with football. In

addition, some people HAVE told me that I should call it soccer in North America

because football is another game, but I still do not understand how a game played

with a ball by hand can be called “football”. The first time I played football with a team

in China was seven years ago, WHEN that my life and about many things on about

me, which has changed my life and made my life more colorful. Never ever ever use

the word ‘colourful’ again – it’s Chinglish – I have read it 5000 times. 

To be honest, my personality type is introverted, which means I am always

prudence PRUDENT with others. I studied in Huimin high school, which was a youth

foundation of a football club, so there were lots of boys who played football well. By

their influence, I was exposed to their amazing talent and speed of running, P (;)

therefore, I have been playing football since that summer. (4) Football has made me

get more good friends and encouraged me to be confident in myself. Every single

second I has SV played with THE ball was HAS BEEN Exhilarated (ING)/and

Incredible. Every time I have running RUN on the pitch, I HAVE felt the speed of

wind. The summer of 2010 was significant for me; I was playing football on PE class

with my classmates P Sun P and others. While we were making a talented team pass

to push the ball gradually into opponent ground, I run RAN to a space which was DID

not have defender. Therefore, Sun saw me and passed a through ball outpacing the
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defense, which was a great chance for goal. Immediately, I coolly finished with a

powerful shot. Then P many crucial things happened.

While, it has HAD been a beautiful shot before that perfect DISPLAY OF

teamwork. (3) However, that THE ball was too fast and forceful resulting IN A

crossed net. At that moment, three girls were walking behind the door, P (;) at the

same time I was ready for celebrating, it hit one girl’s shoulder. (2) She was talking

with her friends and completely unaware of the ball flying to her. Then P she tumbled

on the ground after she had been hit by my ball. Meanwhile, that was a blank

moment which I had never have this experienced. At that time, I felt depressed AND

full of regret, CS shortly after P Sun noticed me to checkING and make MAKING an

apology to that girl. Then P I walked with many regrets to apologize my fault, CS she

was in scared and then I hugged her lightly and kindly asked to take her to the

infirmary. Fortunately, she was not injured at all.

Two months later, I was playing football at the pitch as usual; however, I had an

audience which was that girl who was hit by my ball, CS even the best scriptwriter

could not imagine, THAT she became my girlfriend. To be honest, when I saw her

eyes I found myself inside was deeply attracted to her. After that, I thought about her

every day, in addition AS A RESULT I decided to pursue her. AND she finally

became my girlfriend P I still remembered that night, CS we went to theatre for <Now

You See Me>, CS after movie I took her home. Eventually, at the last corner of that

way just before we got to her house, I asked her to be my girlfriend. She gave me
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the answer I had been dying to hear. As the best answer, I had imagined before

asked her, she agreeD with me.

In conclusion, in short, football HAS really changed me a lot. in ways, I could

never had have imagined. In my opinion, the best time of me my life has been spent

is playing football on the pitch with my friends, especially when there was has been a

lovely girl with me. Football possesses half of my heart and she became the other

half, CS that might be inspire the inspiration of my life, but I have never regretted to

fall the moment I failed in this amazing sport. (1) Football has changed lots of things,

and I have felt grateful about the time I have spent with it.

Final Essay Rubric Level 5 (20%): For Teachers Only

Legend: 5= Outstanding / 4= Exceeding Standards / Assessment

3= Meeting Standards / 2= Progressing towards

Standards / 1= Does not meet Standards

Organization: The essay has an interesting, attention- 5 4 3 2

grabbing introductory sentence and background 1

information. The essay includes a clear and thoughtful

thesis statement that refers to the main idea of the topic.

The conclusion wraps up the essay and refers to the main

idea without repeating it. The narrative ends with moral,

prediction, or revelation. A variety of narrative transition

words and phrases are used correctly and enhance the

flow of the essay.

Content: 5 4 3 2

The essay clearly supports the main idea with details of 1

the event. The details are clear, well-organized, show

depth of thought, and elaborate on the main topic of the

essay.

Grammar/ Vocabulary: Grammar is used at an 5 4 3 2

appropriate level. Grammar points taught in class are 1

underlined, numbered and used correctly. Variety of

academic vocabulary including from Pathways is used

and underlined. Appropriate word-choice. Demonstrates

correct spelling and word forms.

Mechanics/ Pre-Writing/ Formatting: A variety of 5 4 3 2

compound, complex sentences are used. Free of Run-on 1

Sentences, Comma Splices and Fragments. Correct use

of punctuation and capitalization. Correct essay format

(header, margins, font, spacing, justification) is used and

cover page is included. Attention-grabbing title.

Total ___/

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