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English B Student Advisory Exemplar

This document provides an assessment of a student's English essay using specific criteria. The student received a score of 31 out of 36 overall, achieving descriptor level 2 or higher on most criteria including having a clear research question, providing relevant context and significance, using appropriate sources, demonstrating understanding, having a logical argument, and presenting a conclusion consistent with the argument. The essay was generally effective though not perfect, with some weaknesses in analysis, language errors, and incomplete referencing. Overall the assessor found the essay to be a fairly persuasive argument deserving of a low A grade.

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English B Student Advisory Exemplar

This document provides an assessment of a student's English essay using specific criteria. The student received a score of 31 out of 36 overall, achieving descriptor level 2 or higher on most criteria including having a clear research question, providing relevant context and significance, using appropriate sources, demonstrating understanding, having a logical argument, and presenting a conclusion consistent with the argument. The essay was generally effective though not perfect, with some weaknesses in analysis, language errors, and incomplete referencing. Overall the assessor found the essay to be a fairly persuasive argument deserving of a low A grade.

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Student advisory exemplar – English B exemplar C

Criteria Maximum Descriptor level Comments


mark achieved
A Research question 2 2 The RQ is clear in the Abstract and
Introduction.

B Introduction 2 2 The context is given and a connection to


the real world shows its significance.

C Investigation 4 3 Appropriate primary and secondary


sources are well used and noted.

D Knowledge and 4 4 Very good understanding shown about


understanding the works and about the issue generally.

E Reasoned argument 4 4 The argument is clearly set out and


logical. It is well supported.

F Analysis and 4 3 The analysis is generally sound and


evaluation mostly well integrated.

G Use of subject 4 3 The language communicates clearly


language despite some lapses.

H Conclusion 2 2 The conclusion is consistent with what


has been presented and brings closure
to the argument.

I Formal Presentation 4 3 The essay is well structured and the


formal elements are consistent.
Reference format, though consistent, is
not always complete.

J Abstract 2 2 All three required elements are present.

K Holistic judgment 4 3 Overall, despite some weaknesses, the


essay is effective and fairly persuasive.

Total 31/36
Summative comment This is not a perfect paper, but overall it is effective for this
subject. Though it generally takes up the issue of gaming's
influence on society, it is more about literature The language,
though comprehensible, does have errors but rarely do they
cloud meaning. The reference form is not always complete, but
it is consistent and the general layout of the essay ideas is
logical and easy to follow. The strength of the essay lies in the
sophisticated ideas tied conceptually to weave a plausible and
interesting argument that is well supported with text and good
use of secondary sources; thus a low A is a fair mark.

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