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The actual process was just as Mallear had described it, painless but very strange. For a long time after he had stepped out of the casting circle - still retching slightly from the foul brew he had had to drink and the scented oils that had been daubed on his flesh in strange pictograms - his skin had felt uncomfortably tight and stretched across his whole body but it eventually subsided. At the culmination of the ritual spell Mallear placed a thin brass collar around his neck and fastened it there with a pin. "All slaves of Mallear the merchant wear collars of brass rather than the commoner metals, it is his trademark," The minotaur mage explained, conspiratorially. "This one binds a spell to your flesh and hides it from any spies, it triggers if removed and will revert you to your true form. The pin has a cap on the bottom made to appear hammer-flattened, if it seems like you will need your gift remove the cap and take it off, understood?" He nodded, grinning ferally. He hoped a time would come when that order would be given, the beast he rode howled for a chance to come forth and rend flesh, to loose it's fury upon a helpless world. He looked at his hands and thought them soft, weak things but was comforted by the knowledge that it was just a show, like a lion with it's claws sheathed in furry paws. From the folds of his swathe he found the shard of broken mirror and regarded his face as though it were an old friend come to visit. Despite the pleasant nostalgia of seeing his eyes again blue and round of pupil he knew that they were no longer fitting, that they were the eyes of a man, not a dragon. He dressed in clothes that had been fit exactly to his size by some spell of Mallear's, mirroring his own transformation into something smaller. There was at least one pleasure to be had in this return to his old form; the sensual feeling of soft cloth against his skin, not unfeeling scales. Indeed, it was the finest fabric he'd ever worn, softer and thinner than lambswool, some kind of linen made by a technique of weaving that men did not have. Hard Lightning had to wear a disguise too, the hungering blade was locked in an oddly-shaped box with a shoulder strap designed to hold and protect a long-necked instrument. Apparently it was unseen for a human to be armed among the minotaurs but not to be a musician, a fact which Mallear apparently viewed to be agreeably convenient. The ritual was repeated for three other Echidnans, whatever form they had once hidden beneath their swathes were replaced by that of a dusky-skinned young woman with short black hair, athletic build and a pair of sparkling sea-green eyes, and a stick-thin albino boy whose face seemed eternally wrapped in a kind of dreamy euphorea. Both bore clothes and collars of brass identical to Tathal's own. The third struck Tathal with a sense of familiarity, it took him a moment to realise why; it was First. Gone was the mad, hunched, misshapen creature that he had seen wandering the caves, replaced by as handsome a man as he had ever seen. Ruddy hair fell down his wide, square shoulders like lava. He stood straight and tall, arms ending in hands with the normal complement of fingers, not a nightmarish nest of tentacles or a grotesquely-swollen demon's paw. The face that had been so heavy with shame now bearing some tiny glimmer of mixed pride and sorrow. He looked healthy and strong and well proportioned - everything he was, in truth, not. Now Tathal could understand the enormity of what First had lost so that Mallear could perfect the techniques of biomancy, and his master's shame at taking it. Where Tathal had been made greater by Mallear's working First had not been so fortunate. Even before he knew this he had called Mallear a monster for doing it. Well, they were all monsters together now. "Hello there." First said, brightly as ever. "You... speak normally now." Tathal mumbled, more stunned at First's transformation than his own. First smiled and tapped his teeth with a fingernail. "Normal teeth, normal tongue. 'Tis hard to speak with the tongue of a snake and teeth better fit for the mouth of a dog." When Mallear returned from completing the rituals he was dressed as finely as an Imperial noble-son in a deep emerald green tunic and teal trousers decorated so beautifully that they left no need for jewelry. The minotaur passed a hand over his mask and it shimmered and seemed to vanish, replaced by his true features. Yet another disguise for the truth, Tathal thought. "These are Deathwake and Ladon, they are your soldiers, Ravager." Mallear said, indicating the two Echidnans he did not recognise. "They will obey you as they obey me." The two faux'-humans bowed to Tathal. Ladon, the boy, was the first to actually speak, though it would have probably been better if he hadn't - even in human form his voice was thin and whispery, like bones being dragged across a tomb floor. "Command us and we shall kill, if the great master desires it." He said, unctuously, punctuating the sentence with a small, mad titter of laughter. "We are two of the strongest," Added Deathwake, the woman. "We can fight even with Tempus." "Oh?" Tathal said, only mildly interested. "Good, then tell me what you can do..." ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
For the first time in what seemed like months, but was probably mere weeks, he felt wind on his skin and squinted at the harshness of the cold light of day filtered through a sky overcast with gloomy dark clouds. The cool air was refreshing, even when it did bite through his clothes. After wandering over, and sometimes across, a few twisting trails they eventually ended up at a long paved road that streached out through the mountain pass. It was wide, in places the rock had even been hewn flat from the sides of the pass to widen it, and creamy convex slabs of stone scored with rain-tracks gave it an admirably stable surface. Waiting for them was a carriage of dark, polished wood behind four large chestnut geldings with a cloaked figure that was probably an Echidnan holding their reigns. The seal of a five-spoked red wheel was emblazoned upon the door but otherwise it was a modest affair. The figure passed the reigns to Ladon, who lept up to take the driver's seat, and then disappeared back up the rocks after bowing to Mallear, who waved the creature away. Inside, plush green upholstered benches large enough to accomodate minotaurs lined both sides of the cabin. "Sit," said Mallear, indicating the bench opposite his, and rapped the roof with his knuckles, almost immediately the carriage began to move off. "Now, there are certain protocols that I have not explained that may prove useful for you to know while we are in the city." Mallear began, fixing Tathal with his gaze. "I want this affair to be concluded quickly so most of it will likely not come up at all, but as a precaution..." "Yes, Master. What must I know?" Tathal said. "Too much in too short a time, but for simplicity's sake just remember the following; address all minotaurs other than me as 'Sir', if anyone gives you an order then reply that you are on an errand from me then excuse yourself and get away as quickly as possible and never show aggression, even to a human. As much as it would amuse me for one of my fellows to set about chastising an errant human and find themselves missing an arm it would draw a great deal of attention - attention I neither need nor desire. So contain your rage for now, Ravager, no doubt you will have ample opportunity to release it at some time. Some time soon, I should think." "Yes, Master." Tathal replied. Small indignities indeed, he would have no difficulties bearing the window-dressing of servility, especially if he could finally have the opportunity to flex his claws. The ride continued mostly in silence besides for one occasion where Mallear lookedmup suddenly and started having a conversation with Silk - over a mile away back in the caves. It had been short and perfunctory but when it was finished the minotaur had a stormcloud look in his great black eyes but said nothing of its source. The first indication he had that they were nearing a settlement of some sort was an increase of travellers on the road - mostly by foot and hoof, he noted, the minotaurs apparently did not ride the great draught-size beasts they bred. The sounds of rolling wagon wheels and the mundane conversations of teamsters steadily increased until they passed through the city walls, black-stone walls, crenelated and almost as thick than they were tall. There the noise became all-pervasive, thousands of raised voices that ranged between the diaphragm-shaking bass of minotaurs to the alto's and tenors of human voices that seemed to be almost in equal number. From the window he could see a city market street much like any other, just larger. Commerce apparently was universal, even among creatures as strange as the minotaurs. At last the carriage came to a halt before a large building which stood out architecturally from all the others. In contrast to the harsh lines and squareness of most of the city this one bore curving slopes to the wall-tops and rounded arches over the doors. The stone was the colour of red ochre and a copper dome stood as it's roof, trickling verdigris down the sides like ivy. Stepping down into the street he saw that the building itself was curved, spherical like a wheel lain on its side. Stablehands led the carriage and its horses away as they entered, the large central doors were wide open and leading into a long hall with irregularly-shaped terracotta tiles underfoot and curtains of thin umber gauze over the windows that lent the light a sepia tone, softening it from the bleak paleness of the outside. The sound of minotaur conversation echoed up the corridor, at the end of it was a large, circular chamber, presumably the hub of the building. Six minotaurs sat on well-stuffed leather divans smoking something pungent from long-hosed water pipes and drinking dark, steaming tea from silver-handled glasses. Most of the massive bulls were pitch-black in their pelt besides for one cream dappled with red speccles and one of an earthy brown, but all of them were dressed as richly, if nto more, than Mallear, one in particular wore large gem-studded rings on every finger and two more the size of bracelets about the base of his horns. "Ah, so the master of the Red Wheel returns at long last!" Piped one, affecting a muzzle-twisting minotaur grin around the stem of a water pipe. "Good afternoon, fellow worthies," Mallear said in a voice so disarmingly unctuous that Tathal didn't realise at first that it was he who was speaking. "Yes, I have just returned from a recent venture of acquisiton, I trust my establishment has been well kept in my absence?" "Exceedingly, including the quality of your leaf," said another, blowing a puff of smoke. "We've just been admiring some of your wares, the next lot are due in any minute now." "And anything like the last and you can count against getting your hands on them if my purse has anything to say about it." Laughed the gem-studded bull, heartily. "Creation, Mallear, how can you manage to sell such creatures at so low a sum that even a miser like Galdon is willing to part with coin for them?" Said the dappled cream, propping his massive head up in one hand. "I have certain sources, all perfectly legal, I assure you, but my contract with them is quite exclusive." Replied Mallear, airily, striding over to the assembled group and taking a seat on one of the divans. The other three Echidnans followed after the minotaur and knelt on the floor behind him, Tathal quickly followed suit, it wasn't so bad with the sheepskin rug softening the ground. "Indeed, like that albino of yours there... would your sources be able to obtain more of those?" Said the jeweled minotaur, eyeing Ladon. Tathal guessed he was, like the rest, a merchant of some description and a successful one at that. "I could... though it would not be easy, and not cheap." Mallear said, he snapped his fingers and made some gesture and First lept forward to pour a glass of tea which he presented to his master on a small platter. "of course, my prices will still be lower than anyone else's." "What about health? I hear there are some issues with albino's, might not be worth the suns in the long run." Said one of the others, skeptically, "Nothing serious, providing they are kept out of bright sunlight for long periods and given minor dietary adjustments. Eggs, fish, the sort of things that a healthy human should get anyway." Mallear said, dispelling the other's worries. "And that shouldn't be an issue, my stock are too precious to be wasted in fields, you may as well hammer nails with a scepter." "Quite right, but they do make for a fine adornment about one's home." Commented one, also gazing thoughtfully at the ghostly Ladon. "I've heard enough, how many can you get me within the next quarter?" Barked the jeweled merchant, suddenly all business. "As many as you require." Mallear replied, cooly, setting the teacup down untouched. "Creation! Your sources must be mages!" Laughed the dappled merchant. "Not quite, but they have their methods." Mallear replied, wryly. "So if I was to say... twelve healthy, trained and unmarked albinos by time for the spring markets - say, half male, half female - you would be able to deliver on this?" Continued the bejewled minotaur. "Of course, you have some specific clients in mind?" "Mmmm, I know a few in several foreign clans who might be interested, the further affield we sell your oddities the higher the prices we can charge." The merchant took another pull on his pipe, the water bubbled merrily as the smoke was drawn through. "One has to wonder why you do not simply sell outside of Manticore yourself, not that I complain." "I have not the patience to manage a tradign empire and my business with you all has proven more that sufficiently profitable to suit my needs. Besides, is not an arrangement which benefits many far superior to one which benefits only one?" Mallear replied in a voice as smooth as new cream. There was a general murmer of agreement and a few 'here, here's' before a pair of double doors at the other side of the chamber opened and another minotaur walked purposefully through at the head of a line of humans, all bearing brass collars. They were an odd mix; one was nearly as tall as a minotaur himself, though not as massive, another was adult but the size of a child, yet another looked normal until he noticed that one eye was brown while the other was blue. Some seemed not to be unusual of body but rather of skill, such as a contortionist-acrobat youth who flipped and cartwheeled where the others walked and came to a halt smiling widely, arms folded before him, with his chest resting on the floor and long legs arching over his back to touch the toes of his feet on the ground before him. "Hands off that one, he's mine." Said the jeweled minotaur without a wasted moment. "Hah! Do you intend to sell him, I wonder, or keep him to yourself?" Said another. "The thing's one could do with such flexibility..." Said one, who had remained silent until now, elliciting a rumble of laughter. "Well, I shall leave you to your discussions, the servants will settle your orders as usual. Good day." Mallear rose from the divan and cut a seemingly leisurely pace for the doors where the new minotaur stood but Tathal could sense the supressed nervous energy running through his body. The newcomer had a pelt of the same rich hazel-brown as Mallear's own, and the similarities didn't end there; the shape of their horns, the structure of their faces, besides for the other being slightly heavier and broader of shoulder they looked very much alike. Mallear's face, when he glanced at his look-a-like was as impassive as his mask had ever been but it seemed forced somehow. "Come with me, we have work." Mallear said, curtly. The hazel minotaur nodded and closed the doors behind them. Mallear led the way through the curving corridors, as disorienting as the natural caves of the wolven den had ever been. Through wide, open archways along the way Tathal spied more human oddities; a young girl in a giant golden birdcage sang an impossibly sweet song while brushing out her shining hair; a group of men stood around a boiling cauldron, without warning one of them reached in quickly and pulled something shining out of the bottom without showing a hint of pain; in another room a boy was being told a series of numbers by an older man and responding automatically with another stream of mathematics; yet another chamber held some kind of circus school filled with all manner of jugglers and tumblers. 'Echidnans.' Tathal thought, instantly. 'This isn't a slave house, it's the barracks of an army.' "M-Mallear, do you need funds for something? The wheel has made quite a profit since last you were here." Said the broad, hazel bull, expectantly. "So Silk did not tell you any of the specifics of my visit?" Mallear said, not breaking stride for a moment. "Good, better to retain silence, no matter how low the chance of interception. No, I do not yet need my equipment replenished, we are approaching an important juncture in the great working, I need total security during this time." "Security? But what could threaten you?" Said the other minotaur, incredulously. Mallear stopped dead in his tracks and turned to the other. "There are certain forces loose on the land, I do not know if they are a threat to me, or even if they know of my existence, but they are forces I need my greatest weapons about me to guard against." A pained expression flickered across the other's face for a moment before fading away into understanding. "So, they weren't all killed then." He said, it wasn't a question. "It seems not, the descendants of the spymasters are truly worthy of their reputation to have eluded me all this time." Mallear said, bitterly. "Regardless, the time is too delicate to take any risks, and if it comes to it then you are one of the few resources I have capable of fighting on par with a ninja, the others I have brought with me." He added, indicating Tathal and the other Echidnans with a wave of his hand. "These? You are sure they can fight with ninja?" Said the other minotaur, skeptically. The remark irked Tathal like an insect bite, despite the creature's great size he felt a sudden but brief urge to swat the minotaur flat like a mosquito. The image made him chuckle under his breath but he brushed it aside, if Mallear considered this one an ally then he could forgive a few thoughtless slights. "Quite certain, their skills are not as honed but they have certain talents that will foil the advantage posessed by even a Tempus grandmaster." Mallear replied. "They will not fail, trust me." "Of course, I didn't mean to question your judgement," The other minotaur said, quickly. "Stop, not again." Mallear warned, eyes narrowing angrily. He sighed in apparent frustration, though whether it was with the other minotaur or himself Tathal couldn't tell. "I'm sorry, sometimes It just..." Came the sheepish reply, the minotaur gave an embarassed smile and trailed off into silence. Mallear huffed and waved the matter away. "I know... anyway, this is Ravager," He continued. "My newest, possibly strongest. The rest I believe you are already familiar with." "Yes, I know them, despite the changes." "Good, Ravager?" Mallear turned his attention to Tathal. "Master?" "This is Abraxus," He laid a hand on the other minotaur's shoulder. "My brother."
amazing work as usual, by all means, keep it up!
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Cheers,
Onyx Tao[/color]
This is my first comment to this story series, as I only recently read all the chapters up until this one. Of course I cannot stay away from well-written stories about minotaurs, how could I? I will go back and properly comment on each chapter next time I re-read them.
The main reason why I didn't comment on each chapter as I read the series was that I was feeling very unsure about my own feelings about it, and wanted to see where the story would lead to. This uncertainty of mine has nothing to do with the quality of the writing, indeed, the writing is absolutely great. And it is in the Cold Blood universe, which I am more than slightly obsessed with. I was saving my own reading of Dogs of War until Cold Blood had been finished, and I had read it all through a couple of times, and then I felt ready to start on reading Dogs of War.
And I love the first few chapters. I thought it great to see interaction between more 'ordinary' characters, as neither Cassius nor Claudius seemed to have any really unusual gifts or skills. In Cold Blood, most characters involved were either really great mages, or great fighters, or having amazing tempus skills. It was still great, because I was able to relate to most characters in one way or another, but it made me long for some more 'ordinary' characters. And we get some here, in Dogs of War, and then.... argh... you bring in Mallear, who's clearly the least ordinary character so far in the entire Cold Blood universe, and to me it just gets a little bit... too much, sadly. His abilities, his powers are just... over the top, and then the two echidnans who attack Cassius and Arafal in chapter 9, their abilities are also too much for me.
I realize that these are not objective flaws in the story at all, and they're merely due to a matter of difference in taste. Everything in the story is well executed, and I can much understand how these things caters to the tastes of people who enjoy heavy action and characters with extraordinarily abilities. I realize that you love these kinds of things, and I realize that many others do also. So... me telling you this is not meant as any kind of negative criticism, as I fully understand that it is impossible to make a story that everyone will love every detail of.
To me, sadly, all the amazing abilities of those characters distorted the story, and made a great tale start to seem rather silly. I actually stopped reading the entire series at one point, debating with myself wheter I should continue at all or not. Eventually, after a few days, and much pondering, I had eventually come to accept those things as facts, and I decided that I would not let it bother me, so I continued reading. And I loved the chapter Tear-Filled mask, which actually made me able to understand Mallear a lot better, and gave me what I needed to be able to relate to him on at least some levels. That chapter alone suddenly made a lot of the other chapters raise immensely in my eyes again, and I am curious as to what will happen eventually.
His final goal for all what he is causing is indeed well worth striving for, but I am less sure about all means justifying the end in this case. There could be million of other ways he could be doing this, and he could just... discard that damn mask. Grrrr. I feel sorry for Mallear, and someone needs to have a long, and deep discussion with him. I'd love to do it, if possible, but I know I wouldn't get him to listen to a silly human from the real world, which is entirely separate to the fictional world that he lives in. Ah well.
Silk creeps me out, he scares the hell out of me. Even though I know Mallear is more dangerous, and also that Silk would not be the way he is, had it not been for Mallear, but still... If I had to choose between spending one day in the presence of Mallear, or one day in the presence of Silk, I would choose to be with Mallear. And that is not /just/ because he is a gorgeous, sexy minotaur. Hmm, poor guy really needs someone who cares about him.
I suppose I should actually comment upon this chapter, and leave other comments in the chapters they belong to. What I liked the best about this chapter is... the surprise that Abraxus is alive. And after all those years as well. Turns out that Mallear isn't the only absolutely ancient minotaur walking about. And I am glad that /everything/ did not turn out as hopeless as it first seemed, after the chapter of Tear-Filled Mask.
Also, it fascinates me to see how Tathal/Ravager feels about having his altering body momentarily reverting to its previous shape. Forced alteration of body and mind is actually one of my main arousing fantasies. And... dragons are my second favourite mythological creature after minotaurs, so it's nice that he's becoming dragon-like.
I also enjoyed seeing what First looked like before all the changes were made to him. What a fate, poor guy.
So, yes... thanks for a great story, despite our differences in certain of our likings. :) You are truly a great author, and I cannot even begin to thank you enough for writing about gorgeous minotaurs.
Okay, where to begin... well first off, thank you so much for your well thought out (and deliciously long) comment!
The power gap; Fromt he very beginning I wanted Mallear to be exceptional, I feel a villain should be or else they lose their threat value. I originally intended him to be based on a character from a Warhammer 40,000 novel series called the Ravenor trilogy. The character, Zygmunt Molotch, was extraordinary in nearly every way, the main character of the book, Gideon Ravenor, was a genius himself but Molotch always remained ten steps ahead of him right up until the end when he eventually just ran out of luck. But you know what? It didn't detract from the character one iota. Molotch wasn't a Gary Stu, he was a dangerously intelligent man capable of constructing galaxy-shaking plots of labarynthine complexity and he was genuinely frightening as a character. Over time, Mallear has sort of diverged from that original idea into more of a Mad Scientist archetype, but the core of Molotch remains, at least in places.
Cassius and Arafal are kinda like my reinvisioning of Ravenor and his mentor, Eisenhorn. Steel-trap minds, possibly the only ones capable of seeing through Mallear's diversions long enough to foil him, but just not on the same level of supernal power. Now, they are far from powerless, Arafal is a mage of roughly equal power to Mallear and Silk, he just doesn't have Mallear's 3000 years of skill and as was mentioned quite early in the mileu of Cold Blood; when mages do battle, skill tends to count as much, or more, than power. And Cassius is no pushover, despite having only above-average Tempus skills rather than being phenomenal. Interesting note; Mallear's Tempus skills are terrible, he's been so wrapped up in magic that he's virtually ignored the natural abilities of Minotaur-kind.
The abilities of the Echidnans were rather flashy I suppose, but the whole point of the Echidnan gifts is that they were aberrations, things the Creators decided should not exist in their world and so locked away. One of the things I try to go for when thinking up an Echidnan gift is that it should on some level seem fundementally *wrong*. Tathal's power, for example, grants awesome physical prowess but turns him into a raging, twisted monster. The power to turn your own blood into blades or crush someone's sternum with your voice seemed, at least to me, equally f***ed up.
I'm glad you liked Tear-Filled Mask, it's one of my fav.'s and I was a bit dissapointed with te reaction I got from it, it's nice to see someone appreciated it. As for discussions with Mallear... well, he'd be more willing to speak candidly with a human than most mino's, in his own way he's actually more liberal than Teodor in that regard, just as Cassius is slightly less. But, at this point, discarding the mask is not really an option, at least as he sees it, it's the only armour that can protect him from himself. But more on that in the future.
Silk, ah yes, Silk. Mallear has a talent for creating monsters, and not just on the surface, sometimes he does it wihout even realising. Silk hates Mallear in almost equal proportion to how much he loves him. He was given freedom and power, but he never wanted either; Silk was a slave in mind and body, soul-deep, but Mallear wants him to be a mage, a near-god in the scope of CB magic. He is a slave forced to be a master. Be afraid.
I will write a follow-up to Tear-Filled Mask in the future which will cover Abraxus's story *after* his abduction by the spymaster. And in a way, he isn't alive. The Abraxus from the first story is dead, or at least so buried that he could never dig his way back to the surface. The Abraxus that exists now is a new minotaur with the same name, the same body, and little else. But you're right in that he's a symbol of hope, it's just that hope can sometimes be painfull.
Tathal is unusual for a human(ish) character in the CB/DoW mileu in that he's not a slave or even that heavily under Mallear's influence. Mallear made him a promise of power, real power, and followed through on it. He doesn't really care about the great working, but he cares about what Mallear wants. As with Silk; be afraid, but for very different reasons. Where Silk considers power a curse Tathal revels in it without restraint. He is Ravager, the dragon, hoarding power like a bed of gold coins and perfectly willing to hatefuck the world to get more of it.
First is one of the strangest of he series's characters. He's Mallear's "humanity" made physical; a small, twisted and broken thing, almost powerless but always there, just waiting in the shadows behind it all. If Mallear were to ever lose him you could say goodbye to hope.
Thanks so much for your comment, I greatly enjoyed reading it, especially the criticism which I need to hear.
Cheers!
Svansfall leaves truly awesome comments - as you've discovered :-)
I didn't expect to find Abraxus alive. No wonder M. has a ... thing ... about the Scyllan diasporans.
How interesting that M. wants Cassius ... intriguing, intriguing. We'll have to see what happens, yes we will ...
In other words, another marvelous chapter. Thanks!
Cheers,
OT
In my continuum Mallear spent a rather long, violent time hunting down the spymasters that survived the Xarbydis/Scylla war. Abraxus survived the ninja-training but not unscathed. Near three-thousand years later he's recovered a great deal, but he's still not the Abraxus who Mallear knew; he's a new person made mostly from new material and the few remaining shattered fragments of the old. This, understandably, causes Mallear no small degree of anguish and upon discovering just how far-gone his brother was he needed something to lash out at. Spymaster Thadris - the nuit embrassée minotaur who took Abraxus - screamed for a very long time, he wasn't the last.
This arc of the story is starting to wrap up now, hopefully I'll be able to bring it to a satisfying conclusion.
Cheers!
Really; all I am is a reader who thoroughly love to immerse myself in the tales you are constructing, as your characters truly come to life in my head, and I am more than happy to have them there, to think about them, feel and react about them, and to think of how it might be if I was able to interact with them, myself.
And... Noisy Bob: Thanks a lot for your detailed explanations in your long response to my comment! I am much looking forward to upcoming chapters, to find out where things will lead to.
I cannot help thinking that the majority of the most plausible outcomes will be tragic on at least some levels. Especially after I am having gained sympathy for Mallear, and having an understanding for his initial reasons for wishing to re-construct parts of what the creators have left behind.
So, in a way it'll be tragic if Mallear is hindered from continuing, given that his ideas of a 'better world' actually would turn out to be a better world, but it'll also be awfully tragic if Mallear manages to harm Cassius, Arafal and Claudius, in their attempts to stop him.
The 'happy' ending I am pondering, seems far-fetched and difficult to achieve. I don't really believe there will be an ending completely without tragedy in this story.
I can see how eventually Mallear could end up with both Silk and Tathal/Ravager turning out to become severe problems for him.
But... these are all ponderings about future chapters, so... please don't spoil things too much by spilling too many of your thoughts and ideas for future plot! :)
Best regards,
-Svansfall
I think the Creators themselves should come back.
Really, there's nothing that says that Mallear would be able to put things right either, were he to succeed in getting ways to be altered the way he believes to be the correct way.
I've also been pondering... how would the entire world react to sudden drastic, fundamental changes in the balance between different species? ...and how would it happen in the first place? It's just quite mind-boggling all of it.
Although, really... while it'd be lovely to fantasize about things becoming right, the story universe benefits greatly from things /not/ being right. It's easy to make connections to things which are wrong in our real world, and see the Cold Blood universe as a metaphor for that.
So the story universe keeps being fascinating with the existing flaws that the Creators left behind. Chaos strives towards balance, and that causes movement. If the story universe ends up being balanced, we'd lose the chaos that causes so many great opportunities for future stories and scenarios in this universe.
What if the Kurgans were a group of Creators that escaped, and that's how they put up such a good fight?
What if the Creators are time travelers, and are arriving either from the future or the past?
What if they're from another dimention?
What if the Creators are aliens, and they decide to just finish or even just check up on their little experiment?
What if the consciousness of a Creator implanted itself into Claudius, and it escapes when Claudius sleeps, and is detected by the obelisk, hence activating it? The writing all over himself from when he was asleep was the Creator trying to write a message... And as Claudius seemed to understand the interface to something similar to the obelisk while he was asleep, it's a likely explanation.
I have all sorts of ideas.